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My World: My Stories – Utopian Funk (Trifecta Challenge)

February 18th, 2014 27 Comments

Okay, so here it is, on time no less!!  My entry into Trifecta’s Week 112 Challenge, and I maxed out the word limit to boot!  A full 333 words.  Yep when I kick it, I really kick it.  😀

 

The entry I’m submitting is loosely based on a scene from a book I would like to write (currently it’s still rolling around in my brain like lost marbles on a storm tossed ship).  I hope you enjoy it.

 

Ps.  I will also be linking to the other entries for this challenge as well.  After all, it seems only polite to spread the love, right?  😉

 

This week’s Trifecta prompt:

“We’re back to one word, its third definition, and the 33-333 word limit.  The word: Funk – 3rd definition – SLUMP  <an economic funk>  <the team went into a funk>”

 

And now for my take on the challenge this week:  “Utopian Funk

 

 

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The year is, well, it doesn’t really matter what the year is, does it?  All you need to know is that it’s been five world wars, and two (supposed) apocalypses down the road.    Disease, eradicated.   Poverty, abolished.  Money, gone.  Liquor, fake.  Cigarettes, bogus, and smelling of sweetness.  No drugs, no crime, no war.  Face it; the world’s reached a pinnacle in human bliss.

 

I hate it. I know, I should be thrilled, right?  I mean really.  I should be.

 

Death’s met with a smile, surrounded by friends and family, just before a needle fills your body with tingly fuzziness.  No suffering, no sadness.  Everything’s accepted with the mind of the tranquilized.

 

There are a few of us, who know better.  Can feel how counterfeit this all seems.  It’s hard to keep those thoughts.  All the meds, and chemicals they put in food, water, and air.  It keeps us mellow, content, placid.  The idea persists though, quietly, unseen.  Nagging, at the back of our sedated brains, like cockroaches gnawing at the fringes.

 

There are no books that aren’t happy-go-lucky.  We’re only taught rations of history in class, but some of us were given stories.  They’ve been passed down through generations.  We don’t know how accurate any of them are any more.

 

“How much longer, Cas?  I have orders waiting!”

 

“Shut up, Jay, it’ll be done when it’s done.”  God he can be so annoying sometimes, just ignore him.

 

Now, where was I?

 

Intrigued by the world long passed (and being the girl genus in the chem lab) I came up with a solution.  A small tablet, that dissolves almost instantly, leaving no mark in the body it was ever there.  The purpose, to counter act the blissful cloud in our heads, put everyone in a funk, if you will.  Of course, we could all be euthanized for even thinking about this kind of stuff, but it’s worth it for a few moments of clarity.

 

“Here you go, Jay, a fresh batch of Utopian Funk.”

 

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And here are the other entries:

Hypothetically Writingimabookwormchristina @ otherthanlovieKirWords on a PageJester QueenQuick Steppchamblee54SkymisstinypurpleThin spiral notebookLinda Vernon Humorjody @ humanTriumphantHistory of a WomanSarah Ann HallRenadaAllyTMW Hickmanglynis rankinJoe’s MusingsstephBjornE.A. WicklundFictional FoolPaul ClementsLisa AllenKymmInBarcelonaFresh PerspectiveAdrian George NicolaePatricia ( high five and raspberries)TNTMelissa Barker-Simpsonsightsnbytestroy @ As Long As I’m SingingShannon CityGrace BlackRebeccaHigher Ground – LanceAs the Romans Do: DrowningChrisWhiteWritesA Sameness Funk – GinaCarol J ForresterMatticusmartha0stoutValerie (The Word Pirate)H.L. PauffOvercoming FrustrationBoba SquirrelPrincess Del OsoAndrew GearyHerofcorsoT N KerrCherylDanny JamesObese ElephantPolysyllabic Profunditiesuneven stevenGeorgia aka BastetKathySwords of the AncientsAesop ClerkjetgirlcosWhispering Insights (Oliana)theinnerzone

 

About the author

I’m a Goth/Hippie who loves to try new things and dabbles in anything and everything that I find enjoyment in. That can include but is not limited to, cooking, art, digital design, jewellery making, photography, gardening, nature, animals and whatever else strikes my fancy. I’m an optimistic (occasionally) perfectionist (constantly), who can be very sarcastic (incessantly), but all in good humour. :)

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This could go to so many different places. I’m intrigued. Nicely done.

 

    Thanks TNK. I’ve toyed with a number of different ‘places’ when it comes to this story. I think it will be a fun one to write out fully, if I can ever get around to it. 🙂

     

This is creepy, but with a great voice which makes it read really well. Thanks for sharing and linking up!

 

    Creepy is good. I like creepy. 😉 I’m glad you found it read well. I always worry a bit about the style I write some of my stories in. It’s not always well received, or commonly done. Thanks for having a look and glad you enjoyed it. 🙂

     
KymmInBarcelona

Hmmm Not a world I’d like the live in, but it doesn’t seem too far-fetched either. Love the title!

 

    Yeah, not sure I want to live there either. Vacation there, maybe, lol. Not to far fetched at all, especially since a number of the ideas in the story are already being done and/or in the planning stage to be implemented. bit scary in its own right if you think about. o_O

     
TNT

I like the world you’re building. The back story is all your own, the fiction is a mix between “Brave New World” and the dystopian film by Anonymous about perpetually happy people. I think there is an inner voice, that is very rhythmic, and all your own, wanting to come out in the writing. I would love to see this world come to fruition. Have you probe the nature of happiness, and freedom; the role drugs can take in it.

 

    Thanks so much for the words Tuck. 🙂 I do hope to really dig into this story at some point and get it out on paper, so to speak. Just have so many ideas it’s hard to get them all out. 😉 You know, I haven’t seen “Zenith” yet, but would like too, and now that you compared this story with that one, I really want to. 😀

     

Utopia revealed. Excellent take.

 

    Thanks Yarn. I’m glad you liked it, and thought it was ‘excellent’ too! I feel so loved right now, lol. 😉

     

This has a very Kurt Vonnugut (I just misspelled that, and I’m way too tired to look it up) feel. It makes me think of a short story of his where nobody died, so the population had exploded, and old people were heavily resented. (Do I remember the title? Course not.)

 

    I don’t blame you for not looking it up. Sometimes I get that tired where it just seems too much of an effort to look something up. 😛 But if it makes you feel any better you only misspelled his name by one letter. The first “u” should be an “e”, Kurt Vonnegut. And to answer your own question, the title to the short is “Tomorrow and Tomorrow and Tomorrow”. 😀 Can you tell I’m a fan of Vonnegut’s? Lol. I hope, by your comment, that you enjoyed my little short too.

     

Great idea! I’d like to see more

 

    Thanks HL! Hopefully one day you will, lol. I have so many ideas in my already filled head. It’ll take me years to get them all out on paper. By then it’ll be filled with new ideas no doubt. 😉

     

I very much enjoyed this. Very reminiscent of Brave New World, Logan’s Run, and Soilent Green.

 

    Thanks Princess! I love all three of those, and yes this story does smack of their concepts. 🙂 I’m glad you enjoyed.

     

Light needs dark to exist. Cool world you’ve launched into here. Keep developing it.

 

    Thanks so much Quick. I’m glad you enjoyed it. You’re right, you can’t have one without the other. I think that’s what makes life so much fun, and sad at times. 🙂

     

One persons Utopia is another persons hell. Two sides of a coin. Heads or Tails.

Whenever we get to the future, I’m sure there will be somebody waiting to mess it up.

Good work

Enjoyed

Ally 🙂

 

    And just like two sides of a coin, it all depends on the readers opinion as to who is messing with it. 🙂 I’m glad you enjoyed. Thanks for reading, and commenting. Always good to hear how other people take a story.

     

Scary world you represent here…but very interesting how you’ve touched on the idea that no matter what we try to do to create Utopia, someone has a different idea of what Utiopa should e and wants to tear down the establishment. I’m intrigued by 5 word wars… Great idea and write…and thinks for the ping-back!

 

    Thanks Bastet. It funny you should point out the five word wars, lol. No matter how many times I read through a piece to try and find errors in it I always seem that I miss at least one or two. 😛 😀 And you’re welcome for the pingback.

     

      Actually, though I knew it might have been a typo, it hit me as a fascinating idea, something to contemplate…I do know what you mean though about editing and rereading a million times and still out pops a typo…happens to me all the time!

       

        I will have to think on that actually. In the story the “world wars” (at least the last three) do play out far differently then the world wars we’ve already seen. It could be a nice twist to them. Thanks for the idea. 🙂

         

          My pleasure…a little carpe diem sometimes can be cool and take us out of the box 😉

           

            I couldn’t agree more. 🙂 Boxes get to stuffy anyway. 😉 Seize the day, my friend.

             

              Thanks! 🙂 We’ll all leave our boxes!